What you think of this? Would u read it?

By your fifth word, you made a mistake so apparent that no editor would read beyond it. You say, "There are two brothers. AMANDA ..." Amanda is a girl's name so how can she be a brother? I did not read beyond that. When there is a glaring error so early in a story, I quit at that point because I know it will be the first of many. Writing isn't about perfection but that kind of clunker would stop any editor in his or her tracks.